2007年12月19日 星期三
Singing Contest
A singing contest was held by school last Sunday; I wanted to attend this competition in the beginning but I gave up in the end. The reason why was because I was afraid of standing in front of such a huge group of people. It makes me nervous and frightened. In addition, my friend told me that if I had attended this contest, then I would have become so worried about whether I could have done my best or not. Also, I would have spent lots of time to practice and prepare “a 40-second song” again and again; what’s more, I’m not good enough to enter the semi-finals. After considering all these reasons, I decided not to attend it, I just wanted to enjoy all the entries’ performance.
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It's fine to begin an essay with a passive sentence, but this particular sentence is not the one. It would be much better as "The {Nantai/STUT/school} singing contest was held last Sunday".
The point to using a passive is to ignore the agent, i.e., the thing or person that would be the subject of the main verb in the active voice version of this sentence: "The school held a singing contest last Sunday". By turning the subject into an adjective that modifies "singing contest", you don't need the "by [the] school" and you get a natural English sentence.
There is no reason to say "I also wanted to attend..." It would be natural if you had said something like "A, B, and C sang in the contest", however.
You made many tense errors: "frightened", "attended", "worried", "spent", and "wanted" are correct.
"whether or not I could have done my best" is better than what you wrote.
And "all the performances" is, too.
Everybody wants to be a singer, but very few people have the courage to actually sing -- except in Japan, where karaoke was invented. Unfortunately, too many karaoke wailers sound like dying ducks, geese, and chickens. I'm pleased to say that there are no obvious karaoke machines near my apartment.
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