2007年10月29日 星期一
I Need Some Help!
I went to see the Chinese medicine today because my allergy was getting seriously. I felt so uncomfortable and itchy that I can’t stand anymore. The reason why it getting seriously again perhaps is that I went back to Taipei and return to Tainan. My “sensitive“skin cannot accept the weathers, temperatures, and humidity between these two cities. Besides, my skin cannot adapt the climate recently when I was in Tainan few days ago, so it became a little but not big problem for me. As I was arrived Taipei, I thought my allergy will become worse than I was in Tainan. However, as I back to Taipei, I didn’t feel worse but better. How nice! In the other hand, as I back to Tainan, I felt worse and bad. I don’t know what to do? How can I deal with that? I really need help but there is no one can help me. All I can do is to take medicine on time and keep regular rests every day.
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You left out an important word in your first sentence. If you don't bother to proofread your posts, your readers will be less likely to read them happily. I am your main reader, you know, and it's not wise to make me unhappy about reading your writing. That will only result in my giving a lower grade for the class. "I went to see the Chinese medicine doctor today" is how it should read.
Examples of incorrect usage:
1) "allergy was getting seriously" ==> "allergy was getting serious". Learn the difference between adjectives and adverbs and how and when to use them.
2) "that I can’t stand anymore" ==> "that I couldn’t stand it anymore". Verb tenses must be consistent!
3) "The reason why it getting seriously again perhaps is that I went back to Taipei and return to Tainan." ==> "Perhaps it got serious because I traveled round-trip between Taipei recently."
3) "cannot accept the weathers, temperatures, and humidity between these two cities." ==> "cannot accept the differences in weather, temperature, and humidity between these two cities."
4) "Besides, my skin cannot adapt the climate recently when I was in Tainan few days ago," ==> "In addition, my skin couldn't adapt to the climate when I was in Tainan a few days ago,".
5) "In the other hand, as I back to Tainan, I felt worse and bad." ==> "On the other hand, as I was returning to Tainan, I felt worse." You have to choose between "worse" and "bad" at the end of that sentence.
6) "I don’t know what to do?" This is not a question, so there should not be a question mark at the end of it. If you had proofread your paragraph, you might have noticed that.
Allergies are unpleasant afflictions. Good allergists are probably difficult to find. And medicine for allergies is not always painless: sometimes it has very unpleasant side effects. I hope you can find some relief.
I left out a word in my sentence in example 3. It should read "between Tainan and Taipei recently".
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