I went to see a doctor of Chinese medicine because of my allergy and my health. I was in poor health since I was very young, my parents and many of my relatives had been worry about my health and also took me to see many doctors whether Chinese medicine or Western medicine.
I've been taking Chinese and Western medicines for a long time, each of them have their pros and cons. For example, Chinese medicine has to take a long time to cure your body and then improve your health, whereas the Western medicine solves the illness of your body quickly. Besides, take Chinese medicine need to be more patient than take Western medicine. I hope my health can be better.
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There are just too many blog posts about Krosa, the latest typhoon. All I can say about it is this: It was wet yesterday when my son and I went downtown. We had to buy and wear raincoats because the wind broke our only umbrella. And when we finally got downtown, both the bookstore we'd wanted to go to and the restaurant we'd wanted to eat at were closed. I hate typhoons.
I'm glad you wrote about Chinese medicine. My wife has great faith in it. I've used it on occasion and it worked well for me, but it conflicted with my Western medicine, so I had to stop it.
"I was in poor health since I was very young," ==> "I have been in poor health since I was very young." You have to use the present perfect here because you are still in poor health, it seems from your last line. Well, so much for the efficacy of Chinese medicine. Sometimes it works and sometimes it doesn't. Second, you have to use a period after "young". It's the end of the sentence. Using a comma merely splices it to the next sentence. That's grammatically incorrect.
"my parents and many of my relatives had been worry about my health and also took me to see many doctors whether Chinese medicine or Western medicine." This sentence is too long and complicated. You have to break it up into clearer parts. For example, My parents and many of my relatives were worried about my health, so they took me to see lots of doctors, both Chinese medicine doctors and Western medicine doctors."
"I've been taking Chinese and Western medicines for a long time, each of them have their pros and cons." The part before the comma splice is fine, but that comma has to be a period or a semicolon (;), or a comma plus the conjunction "and". I'd recommend two separate sentences. "Each (type) has its pros and cons."
"For example, Chinese medicine has to take a long time to cure your body and then improve your health, whereas the Western medicine solves the illness of your body quickly." I think it's better to start this way: "Chinese medicine must be taken for a long time before it produces an effect on your health. Western medicine, on the other hand acts almost immediately in most cases."
Your next sentence is both grammatically impossible -- it's very poor English -- and redundant, so it's unnecessary. Delete it. We already know this.
Your final sentence is weak. It should probably be changed to say "I hope my health improves some day." This statement, however it is stated, suggests that neither type of medicine is working very well.
Your points are very clear, but your writing needs work.
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